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Should i continue this story?
Yes, it's pretty good so far.
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No, it doesn't look interesting.
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Maybe, but this is what you need to do.. (put this in your post)
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PostSubject: -Story-   1/11/2010, 11:53 am

''There is nothing left.. everything is gone. Where is everything? Why is it gone and how did it disappear?''
This made no sense to John. What did he mean with 'everything'? John was quite sure that this didn't make any sense at all and that 'everything' didn't refer to something. He decided to ask him anyway.
''Dad, what do you mean with 'everything'?''
'Sorry John, but i can't tell you. You're too young to understand.' his dad responded. 'One day you will understand what i said John.'
John sighed and stood up. 'I will see you again tomorrow dad. Take care.' Then he walked away.
While he was walking home he didn't really think of the conversation he just had with his dad. What he did think about, was how fast his dad became senile. Last year his dad was still completely ok and although his body was getting older, it seemed like his mind stayed young. But now he even forgets what the current year is.
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PostSubject: Re: -Story-   1/11/2010, 2:20 pm

Maybe you should give some background info on the father and son relationship a bit more to catch some more eyes. I mean i want to know what he was like before he became so senile what words of wisdom did he have to share? Smile

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PostSubject: Re: -Story-   1/11/2010, 2:32 pm

Yeah, that's a pretty good idea. I was already thinking of some kind of flashback and then slowly work towards the present again.
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PostSubject: Re: -Story-   1/11/2010, 2:36 pm

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Yeah, that's a pretty good idea. I was already thinking of some kind of flashback and then slowly work towards the present again.
Sounds good I look forward to reading it. Wink

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PostSubject: Re: -Story-   1/11/2010, 2:42 pm

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Sounds good I look forward to reading it. Wink

That's probably gonna take a while, because i intend to make a pretty long story. Also, i'm lazy. Very lazy. But i'll post it here when it's finished Very Happy
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PostSubject: Re: -Story-   1/12/2010, 8:32 pm

Ditto im lazy too... Razz

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PostSubject: Re: -Story-   1/13/2010, 5:02 am

Maybe, but this is what you need to do.. (After a few years,john asked his dad something,but he farted.The End)
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PostSubject: Re: -Story-   1/13/2010, 8:50 am

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Maybe, but this is what you need to do.. (After a few years,john asked his dad something,but he farted.The End)

How about this:
The next day, John went to visit his dad again. When he arrived, his dad was still sleeping.
''Dad, wake up.'' whispered John softly in his ear. His dad opened his eyes and saw John. Then he spoke to John, but John could hear that he had almost no air in his lungs. ''John..'' he said. ''John, i want to tell you something..''
''What is it dad?''
''I am not.. please forgive me John, please.''
''You are not what?'' John responded, almost crying.
But then his dad farted and died.
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PostSubject: Re: -Story-   1/13/2010, 11:23 am

Uhh mh that is a little weird for an ending lol

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PostSubject: Re: -Story-   1/13/2010, 2:14 pm

I like the ending Razz
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PostSubject: Re: -Story-   1/13/2010, 2:28 pm

Haha, it wasn't a serious ending. I mean, i'm not actually going to use it :p
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PostSubject: Re: -Story-   1/13/2010, 2:31 pm

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Haha, it wasn't a serious ending. I mean, i'm not actually going to use it :p

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PostSubject: Re: -Story-   1/13/2010, 2:35 pm

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PostSubject: Re: -Story-   1/13/2010, 2:37 pm

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PostSubject: Re: -Story-   1/13/2010, 2:41 pm

When i said that i need Verve Fame i was being sarcastic. I don't give a crap :p I'll give you some Verve Fame when i agree with your post or find it funny, not when you ask for it Evil or Very Mad
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PostSubject: Re: -Story-   1/13/2010, 2:49 pm

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When i said that i need Verve Fame i was being sarcastic. I don't give a crap :p I'll give you some Verve Fame when i agree with your post or find it funny, not when you ask for it Evil or Very Mad

Next time,put *sarcasm* at the end or else(pic below)
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PostSubject: Re: -Story-   1/13/2010, 3:03 pm

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Next time,put *sarcasm* at the end or else(pic below)

Geez, i am so sorry that you can't tell when i'm being sarcastic. Really.
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PostSubject: Re: -Story-   1/13/2010, 8:57 pm

Ok now lets not get this out of hand.. Im watching you two. Shocked

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PostSubject: Re: -Story-   1/14/2010, 4:12 am

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Next time,put *sarcasm* at the end or else(pic below)

Geez, i am so sorry that you can't tell when i'm being sarcastic. Really.
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Hahahaha i was just kidding.Sometimes i can tell when someone is sarcastic(or not)
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