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PostSubject: Non Inertia   1/23/2010, 11:07 pm

I wrote this poem with a very connecting meaning

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Once upon a time
Sounds so soft and discreet
Entered a village
Feeding off the screams
Of the high supremes
Board up the walls
The hair-raising noise is back
Drowning the city
Smothering this shack
Providing our panic attack
The alarms are whistling
The flocks beginning to herd
Parallel to the skies
Amongst the unheeded word
This plague has re-occurred
These blades are raining
The people are shredding
Heading to a scorching bedding
This stench is rapidly rising
As our disease is spreading
The spell has been cast
A swift plunge to fall
Coming from the background
Of a bliss-less squall
Concluding us all

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PostSubject: Re: Non Inertia   1/23/2010, 11:14 pm

That sounded pretty good. I like the dramatic words you included. They really made the poem stand out more.

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PostSubject: Re: Non Inertia   1/23/2010, 11:21 pm

Jomadx wrote:
That sounded pretty good. I like the dramatic words you included. They really made the poem stand out more.
Thanks I know i was wanting to through drama at you right when you read it. I want people to figure it out.

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PostSubject: Re: Non Inertia   1/24/2010, 5:34 pm

I'm wondering, is this poem about a specific event or happening?
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PostSubject: Re: Non Inertia   1/25/2010, 12:54 am

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I'm wondering, is this poem about a specific event or happening?
Actually you are on the dot.

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PostSubject: Re: Non Inertia   1/25/2010, 4:41 am

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MH16 wrote:
I'm wondering, is this poem about a specific event or happening?
Actually you are on the dot.

If 'being on the dot' means that i'm guessing in the right direction, then i think this poem is about the earthquake in Haiti.
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PostSubject: Re: Non Inertia   1/25/2010, 11:08 am

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MH16 wrote:
I'm wondering, is this poem about a specific event or happening?
Actually you are on the dot.

If 'being on the dot' means that i'm guessing in the right direction, then i think this poem is about the earthquake in Haiti.
Your in the right direction but Haiti is not the answer. Though this poem fits well wit the Haiti theme.

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PostSubject: Re: Non Inertia   1/26/2010, 3:53 pm

Hmm, can you give me a hint?
Or is it about 2012? :p
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PostSubject: Re: Non Inertia   1/26/2010, 10:46 pm

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Hmm, can you give me a hint?
Or is it about 2012? :p
2012 is true. But its not why i wrote it. I wrote on the theme of 2012. But the poems about a multitude of events all corresponding at once. But those events are of the end of the world whenever that may be.

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PostSubject: Re: Non Inertia   1/27/2010, 12:27 am

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2012 is true.

what are you gonna do on this day? anybody? will you be ready to go to the better place, or to suffer here? lol

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PostSubject: Re: Non Inertia   1/27/2010, 11:31 pm

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