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PostSubject: Im startin a HUGE ON TIME ONLY   2/5/2010, 12:33 am

series called The Chapters. I don't see many people reading my poems and that's fine hopefully I can turn you heads in the other direction. I'm going to start off with chapter 1.

You treat me as if I'm unclean
Why be so mean
When you're around me
Tonight was at ease
But when will the serenity cease
Its a whirlwind of caprice
Please if I may
Throw the drugs away
Must I not be abused by dismay
But its almost impossible
When I'm accountable
Even though I wasn't able
Surrounded by you
Forwarding words on Que
Feeling like I'm being subdued
There's things I don't show
It's my business to know
Nothing for me to bestow
This dis-functional triangle
Circles at an angle
Unable to be disentangled
How am I to escape
Binded to the shape
Of senility and minds-capes
Frowned upon places I go
I have lost my glow
And my flow has slowed
You're the crook
Playing off what you've took
As an innocent cook
I'm appalled by the stench
A highly odorous scent
That I cant comprehend
Too sad to be suicidal
Knowing you're no idol
Yet so crushed and idle
This torture will soon end
Too late to make amends
Because we were never friends

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PostSubject: Re: Im startin a HUGE ON TIME ONLY   2/5/2010, 1:55 am

it's dannys fault lol

what if you never met him?

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PostSubject: Re: Im startin a HUGE ON TIME ONLY   2/5/2010, 10:06 pm

Jomadx wrote:
it's dannys fault lol

what if you never met him?
Well if i never met him maybe my life would be different.

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PostSubject: Re: Im startin a HUGE ON TIME ONLY   2/10/2010, 7:00 pm

Chapter 2

I see you everyday
The color of your skin displays
A lie about to be conveyed
I'm no packaged toy
For you to annoy
Even tough I'm unemployed
Those deceptive eyes
Put on a clever disguise
But I can read your surprise
My heart is decaying
Under the games you're playing
I wonder if angels even hear me praying
Screaming from the top
Of my lungs until they drop
Just begging for a stop
All the fortunes in the world
Wont help me to unfurl
Just give it a whirl
Nothing can erase the mistakes
Forming an earthquake
To topple my aches
As helpless as you're
Your to poor to be cured
In front of my tenure
I cant help you process
The abusiveness
Pain that you address
Think while you can
Speak while you still stand
For the disease is among the land
Up in this tree of deceit
Don't want to fall to my feet
But that doesn't worry me
I hope you freeze
And succumb to your knees
As I breathe the breeze

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PostSubject: Re: Im startin a HUGE ON TIME ONLY   2/10/2010, 7:15 pm

You know, the poems you write are pretty good. But i can never interpretate the rythm right, i don't know why. I guess it's because my English is pretty basic. Or maybe i just don't like this style of writing poems.
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PostSubject: Re: Im startin a HUGE ON TIME ONLY   2/11/2010, 4:03 am

i'm gonna write a script based off of poems jeff can write. we're gonna collaborate. it's gonna sell big.

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PostSubject: Re: Im startin a HUGE ON TIME ONLY   2/11/2010, 8:57 am

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You know, the poems you write are pretty good. But i can never interpretate the rythm right, i don't know why. I guess it's because my English is pretty basic. Or maybe i just don't like this style of writing poems.
Chapters is like a book read all the poems when they're done for a story. Cool

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PostSubject: Re: Im startin a HUGE ON TIME ONLY   5/7/2010, 2:46 pm

This is on hold for now....

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