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PostSubject: (Response to Fiaman's "My suicide letter"..."Realm of Tray"   12/29/2009, 10:42 pm

Response to Fiaman's poems "My suicide letter". Felt like that one caught me the most, so Im respondin to it. lol. Prepare to be astonished...

(The other half of it)

Hmm...
Why am I here,
When all I see is tormented tears,
The agony of spite stares at me with no guilt,
It tore down that wall of my demise I built,
A bleeding heart is left to turn to dust,
Its been deceived by the army of distrust,
Torn is my fate,
Domolished is my name,
Light is has no meaning,
Im reduced to shame,
Sorrow eats me alive,
Blame keeps me awake,
No soul has experienced,
The meaning of hate,
The left hand it lies,
My feeling are steel,
My life is stopped,
Turned into a merely rusted wheel,
Forgiveness scorned me,
Halted me in my tracks,
Im standin here with a wall against my back,
The sadness rises,
The epicness fails,
Like the blade of deceit,
Peeled the skin the delighted tales,
Its rainin over me,
The rain of dismay,
Im not worth it,
So here it shall stay,
But im stuck in this quicksand,
The quicksand of doom,
Its to bury me in the lonely,
Forgotten tomb,
The sea, of rage and anger,
The waves of Jealousy and Snare,
Im bein beat down to no point of despair,
But Im lettin it go,
So unaware,
That the other half,
Is untold,
But what the hell,
Nobody cares,
...Im sent to non-exsistance...
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PostSubject: Re: (Response to Fiaman's "My suicide letter"..."Realm of Tray"   12/29/2009, 10:53 pm

And I didnt even think while I was writing this, no lie!!!
Im a beast!! lol! I cannot be stopeed!!...lol Dude Fiaman and me cannot be stopped!!...lol. We powned this poem thing. That took a lot of energy outta me.
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PostSubject: Re: (Response to Fiaman's "My suicide letter"..."Realm of Tray"   12/29/2009, 11:00 pm

Good job man. it's true the more you do something the more easily it comes to you.

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PostSubject: Re: (Response to Fiaman's "My suicide letter"..."Realm of Tray"   12/29/2009, 11:45 pm

Yuup, why dont you write one? lol.
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PostSubject: Re: (Response to Fiaman's "My suicide letter"..."Realm of Tray"   12/29/2009, 11:57 pm

Trayxhiddenxinxthexshadow wrote:
Yuup, why dont you write one? lol.

because i don't write poems very much. i'm more of a screenwriter. one day i'll sell a script to a big shot, and have my script made into a big box office movie.

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PostSubject: Re: (Response to Fiaman's "My suicide letter"..."Realm of Tray"   12/30/2009, 12:01 am

oohh...cool. I'll be waitin to see the movie, lol. I think I just came up with an idea...lol
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PostSubject: Re: (Response to Fiaman's "My suicide letter"..."Realm of Tray"   12/30/2009, 2:02 am

Your poems are AWESOME!!!
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PostSubject: Re: (Response to Fiaman's "My suicide letter"..."Realm of Tray"   1/2/2010, 1:03 pm

Nice response. Sorry that I havnt been on big new years party with jomad bacardi and 1800 tequila
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PostSubject: Re: (Response to Fiaman's "My suicide letter"..."Realm of Tray"   1/2/2010, 1:16 pm

fiaman wrote:
Nice response. Sorry that I havnt been on big new years party with jomad bacardi and 1800 tequila

woot woot. lol don't forget about that bud. man.. someone should write a poem/lyrics, something along those lines about bud.

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PostSubject: Re: (Response to Fiaman's "My suicide letter"..."Realm of Tray"   1/2/2010, 2:31 pm

Yeah that dro was something else.
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