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PostSubject: A dream [Poem]   6/28/2010, 6:42 pm

We will lay down in the grass,
under the shadow of an old, big tree.
We will just lay there together
and share the moment, for we see;
The sun going down, his job is done.
But for other people at the other side of the world,
his job has just begun.

We will lay there together silently,
enjoying the perfect day.
I'll be so happy and so grateful,
that i fell in your way.

I don't who you are yet,
or when i will meet you.
But i do know what you are thinking of right now,
because you're thinking of me too.

I look out to the day we meet
and i have a feeling it won't be long.
That day will be so great and it the end we will say;
Together, we belong.
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PostSubject: Re: A dream [Poem]   6/29/2010, 12:07 pm

I liked it but fix the grammer lol. Its a good poem, i could see it going into a literature book. ITs good.

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PostSubject: Re: A dream [Poem]   7/1/2010, 4:25 pm

Fiaman wrote:
I liked it but fix the grammer lol. Its a good poem, i could see it going into a literature book. ITs good.

Thank you! But what's wrong with the grammar? :p
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PostSubject: Re: A dream [Poem]   7/2/2010, 2:42 am

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Fiaman wrote:
I liked it but fix the grammer lol. Its a good poem, i could see it going into a literature book. ITs good.

Thank you! But what's wrong with the grammar? :p
You have several spelling errors.

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PostSubject: Re: A dream [Poem]   7/2/2010, 2:51 am

Fiaman wrote:
Mussinator II wrote:
Fiaman wrote:
I liked it but fix the grammer lol. Its a good poem, i could see it going into a literature book. ITs good.

Thank you! But what's wrong with the grammar? :p
You have several spelling errors.

Please help me out, 'cause i don't see them. My spell checker doesn't see them too.
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PostSubject: Re: A dream [Poem]   7/2/2010, 8:16 pm

Mussirus wrote:
Fiaman wrote:
Mussinator II wrote:
Fiaman wrote:
I liked it but fix the grammer lol. Its a good poem, i could see it going into a literature book. ITs good.

Thank you! But what's wrong with the grammar? :p
You have several spelling errors.

Please help me out, 'cause i don't see them. My spell checker doesn't see them too.

We will lay down in the grass,
under the shadow of an old, oak tree.
We will just lay there together
and share the moment, for we see;
The suns going down, his job is done.
But for the people at the other side of the world,
his job has just begun.

We will lay there together silently,
enjoying the perfect day.
I'll be so happy and so grateful,
that I fell in your way.

I don't who you are yet,
or when I will meet you.
But I do know what you are thinking of right now,
because you're thinking of me too.

I look out to the day we meet
and I have a feeling it won't be long.
That day will be so great and in the end we will say;
Together, we belong.


I think thats what fiamans sayin

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